MLT

You don’t say how Sam is able to travel between parallel worlds, which I feel is important because it’s not everyone that can do that! Secondly, I don’t think the idea of risking your family’s life is an option regardless of the reason. Maybe, they get kidnapped before he realises he’s risking their lives, and then as well as saving the alien race, he has to rescue his family.

MLT

There is a lot of advice out there on how to write a synopsis, all saying different things…

But here’s my two pence worth.

I think the synopsis makes your story seem muddled and hazy.

I’d say you need to focus on Sam as the main character and:

- what he wants (the wild carrots and to save the elf world presumably – I’m assuming Sam’s a human not an elf?).
- why he wants it (your synopsis isn’t clear about what his motivation is for agreeing to deliver the wild carrots to the elf world – is it because of the kidnap of his family members or is it to help his friends he’s made in the elf world or is it both?).
- what he overcomes to achieve his goal (you mention him “facing a number of dangers and overcoming several difficulties” this is a bit vague, I think you need a couple of specifics).

I’d also cut down on the characters and some of the detail in the synopsis. Stick to the main plot points and characters and you won’t go far wrong.

About the plot overall - from what I’ve gathered, elves and parallel worlds seem to be viewed as a bit of a cliché in the publishing world (and I say that having written an elves and parallel world story myself. Sigh).

But I guess like anything el se, if you can write something from a fresh angle and with a strong voice this won’t matter too much – look at Artemis Fowl for example.

Please take the all above with a pinch of salt!
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