Title : The Outcrop

Author : John Allen

Genre : Action, Novel

Review Extract from Review By: pendle65

"The Outcrop - By John Allen

This is a well crafted story in a genre that I enjoy reading and had it been a book that I had picked up in a bookshop I wouls have bought it.

Readers of thrillers are well known for being hypercritical and there is one or two things that you might want to look at.

Prologue

Fantastic start to the story, just the sort of start needed for this genre.

Is the battery driven timer operating a transmitting device sending a signal to a detonator attached to the tanker body?
It's not clear.

The driver of the vehicle should be wearing gloves - Okay, so there will not be much left of the tanker when it explodes but the crime scene guys will be all over the area like arash and find the keys. These could have partial fingerprints on them and possibly DNA from the drivers sweatiy palms. I know it's nit picking but believe me someone will spot it.

The story

The pace slows down quite a bit as you have a lot of groundwork to fit in. Having said that the story still has to keep moving apace.
Never be afraid to remove large chunks, however good you thought they were. I recently managed to reduce a story by a thousand words simply by removing anything that didn't further the plot and illuminate the characters. It was a great improvement and I didn't miss the purple patches one bit.

Examples of this could be: .... (YouWriteOn note: reviewer's examples not added in this forum post so that other reviewers can also decide in their opinion and feedback)

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Good luck with it all."

Synopsis
Terry Saunders, ex-M16, thinks he can leave his past behind him But the shadows of an Afghanistan operation that went badly wrong pursue him across southern England as he struggles to keep himself and his family safe.
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