Hello Phil Whitaker
Thanks for your critique. I now know what to do to CLOUDS GATHER. Part One must be seen through the eyes of Blanche, my leading character. I more or less managed this in Chapter One because all we had was Blanche accompanied by her inanimate aeroplane who couldn't answer back. When Blanche lands in France, however, and gets involved in dangerous enterprises, I was tempted away from my heroine's thoughts and drifted out of her head thereby boring readers with details of plot that mean nothing unless they are experienced through the eyes, brain and ears of my beloved Blanche.
Phil, if you're out there, thanks a million. BACK TO THE BLOODY DRAWING BOARD !
This post was last edited by 2548196, 14 Mar 2006, 20:56