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bevalex
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I should 'speed it up' and get rid of the 'superfluous detail'. There should be 'more drama'. It's 'to cluttered'. You got 'bogged down'. The story is 'so-so'. Thank you to the four people who were honest enough to tell me that reviewing my submission was hard work. I've takent it off and will be doing some ruthless editing before I let anybody else suffer again the tedium of a sluggish plot. Don't worry, you were all very tactful and I am not in the least offended. I just needed to be told. Thanks.
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Groupie59
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When you say you're not offended ... it really doesn't sound that way.
I've been beaten up on here, I would think we all have at one time or another, and you really do have to take it. Because if there's been four or five, saying the same-ish thing, it is not a coincidence.
Learn from it, lift your chin up, and start writing. Prove them wrong is all we can ever hope to do. Ding ding, round one!
Tony
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bevalex
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No, really. I am very happy to be told the truth so that I can do something about it. The reviews were detailed, helpful and very fair. I am not feeling offended in the slightest. Quote: Groupie59, Thursday, 10 May 2012 15:31When you say you're not offended ... it really doesn't sound that way. I've been beaten up on here, I would think we all have at one time or another, and you really do have to take it. Because if there's been four or five, saying the same-ish thing, it is not a coincidence. Learn from it, lift your chin up, and start writing. Prove them wrong is all we can ever hope to do. Ding ding, round one! Tony
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alibali
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Good for you! It IS hard to accept criticism, my first reaction is often defensive, I have to leave it a couple of days and come back to it to extract the good, useful stuff from these reviews, which no matter how tactful or sensitively put, STILL hurt! Maybe that's just me, not being as graceful about it as you!
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bevalex
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Thanks. I suppose I was a bit hurt for about a second, but I already kind of knew that I was enjoying the words too much and not concentrating on pace and interest. It really was the best thing that could have happened and now I've revised it I feel a whole lot better about it. Ready for the next advice and hoping for lots of it.
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Andrew A
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Well done, it’s hard to take criticism but this is a good proving ground. Agents and editors are far more ruthless and they get to see the whole deal! Good luck with the rewrite.
This post was last edited by Andrew A, 13 May 2012, 08:20
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rosalindwinter
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I got the same sort of thing from one of my pro crits: I was advised to go through the whole piece, cutting everything that wasn't absolutely necessary, even if it was only a couple of words in a paragraph. It's surprisingly hard to do, I find: you get so attached to what you've written that it's quite painful to chop bits off. But I have to say that the advice was spot on as far as my work was concerned, and I had a much better piece when I'd finally steeled myself to do it.
This post was last edited by rosalindwinter, 13 May 2012, 08:42
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youngun
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Quote: rosalindwinter, Sunday, 13 May 2012 08:42I got the same sort of thing from one of my pro crits: I was advised to go through the whole piece, cutting everything that wasn't absolutely necessary, even if it was only a couple of words in a paragraph. It's surprisingly hard to do, I find: you get so attached to what you've written that it's quite painful to chop bits off. But I have to say that the advice was spot on as far as my work was concerned, and I had a much better piece when I'd finally steeled myself to do it. Amen to that.
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